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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The diagrams present the
infomations
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information
relate
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related
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 to the
stragic
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strategy
 of how wave-energy
machine
 work and
two
 option
location
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locations
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 for
place
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placing
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it
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them
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.
To begin
, first of all,wave direction will go into
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the chamers
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chamers
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chambers
 of the
machine
. It will
led
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lead
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 to
air flow
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airflow
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 inside
pull
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pulling
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 out
two
 blades,
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and impact
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impact
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impacting
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 them spin.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,
two
blade
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 were linked with
a
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an
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 electricity generator.
Therefore
,
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the machine
a machine
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machine
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machines
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 can
produces
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produce
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 electricity.more over,
air
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the air
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 outside will come on top of
wave-energy
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the wave-energy
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machine
,
make
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making
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 a
cicular
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circular
 air to
makes
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make
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machine
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the machine
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 keep working.
Secondly
, there are
two
 locations to install machines which are pros and cons in each
options
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option
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. The first option is
place
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to place
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in
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it in
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 shallow water
where
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which
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have
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has
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low
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a low
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 price but
also
have
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has
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small
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a small
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 wave. So it has
few
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little
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 energy. In the second choice.
Machine
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The machine
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 will be
putted
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put
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 in
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a depper
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depper
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deeper
 water lever. It will cost
hinger
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a higher
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 price but have more energy because it has
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a biger
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biger
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bigger
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 wave in the deep water lever
sea
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the sea
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 to
genarate
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generate
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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