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The graphs below show the different reasons of two group of students to choose Dorrifod University Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and mae comparisons with relevant.

The graphs below show the different reasons of two group of students to choose Dorrifod University Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and mae comparisons with relevant.
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The pie charts depict the proportion of six what makes students
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who choose
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choose
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chose
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 Dorrifod University, which are divided into two categories,
people
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 from 18 to 24 and
people
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 over 25.
Overall
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, factors between age group categories are the same, but their proportions in each group are different. Regarding
people
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 aged 18 to 24, the close distance from home and what
offered
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is offered
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 in the course are the two most popular, at around 35%. These are followed by facilities of the university at 14% in the second position. Chance to study abroad during the course, the relation to industry, and
reputation
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the reputation
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 of teaching staff account for just a quarter of the total percentage. Turning to
people
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 over 25, close to home and course offered show a similar position when compared with
people
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 under 25, but have a greater difference in amount, a gap of 15%.
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, there are
also
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 large differences in the proportions and positions of the other four factors. For
people
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at
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in
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this
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 category, related to
industry
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the industry
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 (20%) and
reputation
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the reputation
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 of the lecturers (12%) are much more important than opportunities to learn
oversea
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overseas
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 (3%)
as well as
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 the facilities on
campus
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the campus
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 of the colleges (2%).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graphs
  • reasons
  • choose
  • Dorrifod University
  • summarize
  • information
  • selecting
  • reporting
  • main features
  • make comparisons
  • relevant
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