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In many countries, women are allowed to take maternity leave during the first month after the birth of the new-born. Do you think the advantages of maternity leave outweigh the disadvantages?

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There are several countries in which the government have allowed
the
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women
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 to take
maternity
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 leave from their respective jobs after giving birth to a child. I opine that the pros of taking
maternity
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 leave
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 the cons. The following fragments will elucidate my opinion. There are numerous positive effects of taking
maternity
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 leave for
the
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women
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. First and foremost, the
mothers
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 can take proper care of their
new-born
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newborn
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 child.
Initially
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, the babies require proper nutrition and care when they are born. So I think that no one can take care of a baby, in the way the mother can.
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, it is
very
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essential that the mother of a
new-born
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newborn
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 baby stay with her child to look after him.
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, it will
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 give an opportunity to the mother to spend quality time with the
new-born
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newborn
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 kid.
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, it will
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 give some time to the
mothers
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 to take proper rest after the delivery. The
mothers
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 can get relief and can prepare themselves for the
further
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 loads.
As during
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 pregnancy,
woman
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the woman
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 undergoes extreme stress both physically
as well as
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 mentally. So
this
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 short break
help
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mothers
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 to take proper rest.
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, by taking
maternity
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 leave, their
job
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 will remain secure. In some countries, where no
maternity
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 leave is given to
the
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women
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, they have to leave their
job
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 prior to delivery, struggling later to grab a
job
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.
Maternity
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 leave aids them to remain safe and they can continue their
job
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 after the end of
her
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their
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 leave term.
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benefits
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the benefits
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 of
maternity
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 leave, there are some negative effects
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. Families that are led by woman’s salary are the most affected, if the woman takes unpaid
maternity
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 leave, it will put lots of financial strain on the family.
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, I reiterate that the cons are negligible as compared to the advantages of taking
maternity
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 leave. The Government of every nation should make it mandatory to allow paid
maternity
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 leaves to the
women
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 during the first month after delivery.
This
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 will be beneficial to the females in several ways.

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