All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that
,
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cars
which
runs
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on
fuel
should be banned and
people
should start using electric
cars
.
However
, I would argue
cars
using
fuel
should not be abandoned as they are
cost effective
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and
ensures
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safety.
Firstly
, we can save a lot of money. If we choose to
use
cars
which are petrol, diesel,
natural
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gas driven, it can save us a lot of money.
As electricity
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is quite expensive in some
of
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the
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countries
such
as Bangladesh India and Pakistan.
Moreover
, it is
also
good for
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national economy as natural resources
helps
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the
countries
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economic growth. So if
people
use
fuel driven
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cars
it will give
boost
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to their
county’s
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economy as more and more
people
will
use
fuel
.
In addition
, it can save
huge
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amount of time as
cars
which
runs
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on electricity
is
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slow and
time consuming
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.
For instance
, Developing
counties
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like Bangladesh, India,
Pakistan
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and Pakistan
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can never think of electric
cars
as it
cost
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around
hundred
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dollars to charge a
car
battery overnight.
Secondly
, electric
cars
are
accident prone
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.Driverless
cars
runs
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on sensors and often they fail to avoid obstacles.
As a
result
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result,
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people
might get seriously injured.
Although
it sounds quite exquisite to
use
a driverless
car
but
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it often
create
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problems for senior citizens as they don’t know how to operate it.
Moreover
, electric
cars
can’t be run
on
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in
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countries like Bangladesh, India, etc as
people
hardly abide by the traffic rules.Electric
cars
can often have a collision with
people
walking and running here and there. As
people
lack knowledge of these
cars
they might walk past
by
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these
cars
thinking the driver will stop the
car
, but if the sensor fails to detect
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the obstacle
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obstacle
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obstacles
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ahead, an accident is
sure
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shot case here.
For example
, in
USA
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the USA
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, one Tesla
car
failed to detect obstacles ahead and created massive destruction. So, I would argue on the ground that,
people
should
use
fuel based
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cars
in spite of, electric ones as it is more
cost effective
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and saves
people
from
hazardous
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situation
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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