In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries, the elderly

community

is growing at an unprecedented rate than ever before. Some people believe it brings many benefits and others believe it was a great issue for administrations. In

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essay, I will focus on both sides and

finally

, hope to give my opinion. The elderly generation

also

has a right to live and everyone becomes older one day, so everyone has the responsibility to give concern to adults. Their enormous awareness is more productive than younger

,

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because

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in their long life, they

got

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more experienced and

intelligence

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we cannot compare it with today's younger generation's brain.To get that learning younger had to learn till PhD. Because of

this

reason, intelligence calculus spread evenly worldwide. So

this

a major point to increase learning ability among the people. and in that

community

have day-to-day insight which can change strong things to simple matters.So the

government

has a good opportunity is increase the older

community

.

On the other

hand

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increasing aging ones are huge problem for the administration because the administration has to provide enough

concern

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concerns

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to them

such

as nutrition responsibility, health

concern

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concerns

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, home responsibility, etc.For that

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benefits

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benefits,

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authority has to keep young job seekers near them.

Due to

this

reason

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government

has to spend huge money. on nutrition supplements, medications, and Care assistant payments.

On the other hand

ministry has outweighed the budget and the

government

has legal regulations to solve

this

matter. In Conclusion, the older

community

also

have a right to live without

burden

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to

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the

government

.

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my knowledge, I think

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society is

best rather

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than increasing

in

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only older individuals.