The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish.
The diagram illustrates the salmon’s life cycle in 3 different areas, including with
river
, estuary and ocean.
It can be seen that there are many stages of the differentiation of salmons
from eggs to mature adults. Moreover
, we can also
see that salmons
spend most of their time of their lives in a river
and ocean
. It will pass an estuary only once in their lifetime.
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oceans
To begin
with, their incubation and transformation period, after mature salmons
lay eggs which are transformed into small young salmons
in a river
. The young salmons
stay in the freshwater for a while
to grow up completely. Then
, the fish swim through an estuary one time in the adolescent stage to an ocean where it can migrate to many places.
However
, in the mature stage, salmons
will swim back upstream to the spawning area and lay eggs in a river
. Then
, the life cycle reoccurs.Submitted by pramai177 on
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