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The system used for rubbish collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours suggest what should be done about the problem

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 to complain
you
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 about the disfunction of the Garbage collection system in my community .
From
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For
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 the past 3
months
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 we
are
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 facing
this
 issue .The waste management vehicle
supposed
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 to come twice every week as per the contract but, now it
his
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happeing
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happening
 only once
in
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a week and not sure about the day.On
the
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each
visit
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 they
are collecting
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 either dry or wet waste .
This
 is causing a negative impact on the community .People are feeling inconvenient to step out of their houses
due to
foul
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the foul
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 smell from bins.Many citizens are falling sick
due to
garbagge
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garbage
that is
 sitting on the
drive way
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.During the rainy
season
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 the water is getting stagnated in the bins which is like welcoming new diseases. I suggest you
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either increase the workforce in that specific department or
handover
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 the contract to the best company .I request you to take proper action . look for a quick and prompt response from your end . Yours sincerely, Vikram.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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