The diagram below show the product life cycle of the car
The picture illustrated
life-cycle
of Correct article usage
the life-cycle
cars
from raw materials
to end
of Correct article usage
the end
cycle
, as unrecyclable Add an article
the cycle
a cycle
parts
.
we can start to discribe
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describe
this
process from mining raw materials
, one part of which are
formed Change the verb form
is
to
components, others with formed components.
All of them are delivered to factories. Change preposition
into
There
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Their
cars
are manufactured, also
vast
majority of Add an article
the vast
cars
are sold by dealerships. The next stage of process
is using Add an article
the process
of
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apply
cars
and the average number of possible owners is 3. During cars
use they can be repaired and serviced.
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car
Thereafter
cars
are sold for scrap, which separated
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is separated
to
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into
materials
and recycled parts
. And
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Finally
finally
, in
the end of life-cycle Change the preposition
at
materials
and recycled parts
are sorted into two parts
: one of them returns to factories and continues cycle
, Add an article
the cycle
the
second unrecyclable part is scrapped.Correct word choice
and the
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