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The diagram below show the product life cycle of the car

The diagram below show the product life cycle of the car
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The picture illustrated
life-cycle
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the life-cycle
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 of
cars
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 from raw
materials
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 to
end
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the end
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 of
cycle
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the cycle
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, as unrecyclable
parts
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. we can start to
discribe
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describe
this
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 process from mining raw
materials
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, one part of which
are
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is
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 formed
to
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into
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 components, others with formed components. All of them are delivered to factories.
There
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Their
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cars
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 are manufactured,
also
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vast
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the vast
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 majority of
cars
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 are sold by dealerships. The next stage of
process
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the process
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 is using
of
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apply
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cars
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 and the average number of possible owners is 3. During
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cars
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car
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 use they can be repaired and serviced.
Thereafter
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cars
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 are sold for scrap, which
separated
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is separated
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to
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into
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materials
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 and recycled
parts
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.
And
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Finally
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finally
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,
in
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at
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 the end of life-cycle
materials
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 and recycled
parts
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 are sorted into two
parts
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: one of them returns to factories and continues
cycle
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the cycle
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,
the
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and the
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 second unrecyclable part is scrapped.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, materials, parts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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