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In some countries young people are encourage to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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In
this
 present world, the encouragement of youngsters to
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 or
travelling
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 abroad for almost one
year
 is a common fact,
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 in the period of time between high
school
 graduation and starting university paths. I personally believe
this
 is a matter where
advantages
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 could outweigh the disadvantages in many ways. It is widely known that travelling for a
year
 after
school
 could benefit
people
. An experience abroad gives
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young
people
 the
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chance
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 to boost their experiences in many
field
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: enhance language skills, learn new cultures,
improve
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and improve
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 social connections. Generally, they are willing to experience a study trip in order to gain more
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 for their future,
for example
 during a job interview these
inhabits
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 could
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grab
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attention and seem more reliable and professional if they had studied abroad for one
yer
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year
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.
Thus
, a massive number of students are going to
experiment
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the
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life in a college or in a host family, so that it leads to a full immersion in that culture and environment and gives
also
 the choice to make new
friendship
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.
Likewise
, working for a
year
 before deciding to start university studies, could clear their head on what they prefer to do.
For instance
, there are several cases where
people
 find their own ways or passions without the necessity to attend university.
On the other hand
, there is a counterargument that if
people
 decide to go abroad or work after high
school
, they will
lost
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 a
year
 of their life.
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 nowadays there is a high expectation
in
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 young
people
 and putting your life
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 stand-by could be seen as a negative point in society.
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 disadvantage could be that living abroad, even for a short time, gets away from your relatives and your friends.
To conclude
, I reiterate my statement by saying that there
are
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 a myriad of benefits
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on
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 taking a short break after finishing
school
,
thus
 youngsters should chaise their ambitions and desires, and adventures like these should strengthen their motivation and stand them in
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good stead.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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