7.Some people believe that it is the responsibility of politicians, rather than individuals, to reduce the world’s environmental damage. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, global warming is increasing
immensly
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immensely
due to
the
pollution
we do, so some
people
comment on
this
that, it is the responsibility of the politicians, rather than individuals. If questioned, I would strongly disagree with the statement above, detailed explanation is provided in the following write-ups.
Firstly
,
pollutions
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pollution
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are
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of many types like land
pollution
,water
pollution
,
others
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and others
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, but all these kinds of
pollutions
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pollution
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deteriorate
earth's
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the earth's
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health which includes
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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,
nature
and other things.
These pollutions
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are
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caused by
the
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humans, we can reduce these things, for that
people
have to be together and understand the necessity to control
pollution
. Adding more, we can say that
the
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pollution
is the cancer of
earth
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the earth
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, it will kill
earth
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the earth
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slowly, so to reduce
this
damage we
people
should understand and we need to be more cautious, the rules made by the
government
should be followed strictly. There should be public
awarness
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awareness
programs to let
people
know the importance of
nature
, and how
do
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we
conserve
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.
However
, some
people
say that
,
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cleanliness is something
government
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the government
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should take care of and not
by
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individuals, as that person might think that
this
is
government's
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the government's
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job.
People
throw rubbish here and there
,
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and say that the
government
will work on
this
problems
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problem
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. Some
people
just
complains
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, but no sort of help is provided by that person.
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, each and every person should contribute
in
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to
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the cleanliness
programes
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programmes
programs
, and should help to preserve our
nature
, as
government
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the government
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cannot do anything without
full
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support of the
people
.
Instead
of only blaming others we should do something for
better
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environment
,
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because if
the
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nature
is preserved, our future generations
would
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live life healthier.
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