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26.The chart below gives information about the average life expectancy in six different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

26.The chart below gives information about the average life expectancy in six different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graph displays the comparison of the average
life
expectancy
 in six nations: Monaco, the United States,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Laos, Rwanda and Kenya
Overall
, Monaco, the United States and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 have
higher
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a higher
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 rate than the other three countries, Kenya had the smallest average and they all are between 50 and 90
years
 old. People in Monaco have the longest
life
expectancy
 compared with the other five countries, with an age of approximately 86, the second longest
is
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in
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 the United States, with 80
years
 old,
while
Philippines’
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the Philippines’
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 average
are
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 10
years
 less than the U.S. which is just above 70
years
 old. Laos had a number very near to
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, which was nearly 69
years
 old,
which
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and
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 had around 14
years
 more
of
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life
expectancy
 than Rwanda,
which
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where
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 their average was 55
years
 old.
Finally
, Kenya had the lowest average
of
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life
expectancy
 compared to other countries, with only 50
years
 old.
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