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Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties in maintaining work-life balance. Why is this the case? What strategies do you recommend to maintain work-life balance? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In
this
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 fast-paced
life
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, many individuals are challenged to sustain a
work
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-
life
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 balance.
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,
due to
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 the high demand for a better
life
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 quality and increased
inflation
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rates
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, many
people
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 are constantly working. In
this
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 essay, I will elaborate on why
this
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 is the case and suggest suitable solutions to alleviate the issues in the ensuing paragraphs.
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 with, the primary cause is that there is high demand to maintain a good
life
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 quality.
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,
people
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 nowadays
work
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 for longer hours to build their careers and even to climb higher on the career ladder to sustain a better living as salaries are not enough to cover many families' expenditures.
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, In Riyadh, many nurses tend to
work
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 overtime with incentives
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 the shortage of staff. Another point to consider, is the high
inflation
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rates
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 that have made it difficult for many individuals to maintain the basic
life
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 essentials
such
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 as housing, food and even healthcare are really affected by the increased prices.
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, many families are
deterrent
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deterred
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to live
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from living
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 in the city centres because of the high cost of living, and would rather settle in the countryside,
this
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 has increased the risk of carbon emissions from commuting to
work
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.
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, Many
people
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work
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 in downtown London but live in the suburbs to avoid the high rents in the city. To mitigate these issues a number of strategies can be implemented; Having good
time
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 management and authorities promoting jobs in the rural areas to minimize the effects of
inflation
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.
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, Having good
time
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 management is essential to avoid burnout from
work
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.
This
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 helps to have more
time
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 to spend with family and friends
as well as
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 make
time
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 to relax and
work
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 out.
This
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 aids in decreasing the amount of stress from overwork and helps individuals improve their mental health as well.
Secondly
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, governments should promote businesses in the suburbs and subsidize the cost of housing. To help
people
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 find affordable spaces to live and afford reasonable prices on daily expenditures, authorities should implement laws and regulations on food prices, endorsing projects to assist
people
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 in buying or renting homes
as well as
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 providing standard medical services.
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, In Sweden healthcare is free of charge and housing price is subsidized with reasonable interest
rates
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 for first-
time
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 home buyers to help alleviate the effects of
inflation
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 In conclusion,
due to
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 the increased demand for a better
life
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 and high
inflation
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rates
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, it has become difficult to provide a good standard of living.
However
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, with some intervention from the government to overcome the
inflation
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 issues and good
time
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 management, many of the problems can be resolved.

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task achievement
Your introduction clearly outlines the main points that will be addressed in the essay, and it provides a clear thesis statement. However, ensure that your introduction is more concise to improve clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Your argument about the reasons for work-life imbalance is generally well-structured, but some points could be more clearly linked back to the main topic to strengthen coherence.
task achievement
While you provided good examples to support your arguments, try to ensure that each example directly reinforces the point being made. This will strengthen the support for your main ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Consider using a wider variety of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of your writing, as this will enhance your overall coherence.
content
The essay effectively identifies the key reasons for work-life balance issues, such as high demands for better quality of life and inflation rates.
supporting details
Good use of examples from real-life situations, such as the nursing staff in Riyadh and the housing situation in London, adds credibility to your arguments.
content
Your recommendations for improving work-life balance demonstrate a practical understanding of the issue, showcasing potential solutions.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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