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The diagram illustrates the basic principles brick manufacturing.The process had two ways in which bricks are made.

The diagram illustrates the basic principles brick manufacturing.The process had two ways in which bricks are made.
The diagram illustrates the basic principles
brick
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of brick
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 manufacturing.The process had two ways in which
bricks
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 are made. First of
all
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 we dig up the clay with the help of a digger.
This
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then
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 turns into the metal grid, which is punctured by going through the roller,
falling
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and falling
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 into the filter mesh.Later by adding water to the sand the resulting liquid is poured into a mould or cut with a wire cutter, forming it into shape using a special apparatus.The
bricks
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 that come out of the mould are allowed to dry between
24-48hours
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24-48 hours
. Later,the
bricks
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 removed from the mould were kept in the cooling chamber for 48-72hours, the second
same
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apply
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bricks
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 were heated at a maximum temperature of 870C-1300C ,later stage
is
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to put
it
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in an oven at an average temperature of 200C-980С.
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Ready-made
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Ready made
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Ready-made
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 croups are rolled into one roll and placed in a
deliver
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delivery
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 car

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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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