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The map shows the developments which took place the coastal resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

The map shows the developments which took place the coastal resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
The map shows the developments which took place
the
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in the
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 coastal
resort
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 of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
Overall
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 a comparison of the two maps reveals a change from a largely
ruralto
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rural to
rural
 a mainly urban landscape. In 1990, the
resort
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wad
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was
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 a much greener residential area with a large number of trees and individual
houses
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, but during the next 15 years the
resort
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 experienced a number of dramatic changes. The most noticeable is that all of the trees north of
railway
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the railway
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 line were cut down, with all the
houses
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 along the highway being knocked down and replaced by storey
houses
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.
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, a new industrial estate with
factory
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a factory
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 sprang up in the south-east. Only a few trees in the middle of
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resort
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the resort
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 remained. The woodland was cleared to make way for a supermarket and new high
houses
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.
Further
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 development
were
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was
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 the construction of a ferry on the river,
supermarket
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a supermarket
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 in the south of the lake,
new
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a new
the new
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 stretch of highway
nearly
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nearby
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 and
airport
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an airport
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 in the north.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words resort, houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Coastal resort
  • Development
  • Infrastructure
  • Commercial district
  • Residential area
  • Harbor
  • Marina
  • Pedestrian walkways
  • Urban planning
  • Environmental impact
  • Renovation
  • Tourism industry
  • Recreational facilities
  • Expansion
  • Accessibility
  • Modernization
  • Attraction
  • Accommodation
  • Economic growth
  • Leisure activities
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