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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart provides data on the proportion of inhabitants of five Australian cities who bought fresh or
instant
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coffee
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 and what percentage of them preferred café for tea or
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4 weeks.
Overall
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, people in four towns of Australia were more passionate about going to café for drinking,
while
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 in
Adelaide
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, buying
instant
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coffee
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 was more popular.
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, in all five cities, the popularity of buying fresh
coffee
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 was less than
instant
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coffee
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.
According to
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 the bar chart, going to cafés was the most popular among inhabitants of towns except in
Adelaide
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. Melbourne and Hobart were the first rank by a little more than 62% of residents. Sydney was comparably high at just over 60%, followed by Brisbane at over 55%, and
finally
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Adelaide
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 at under 50%.
Adelaide
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 was the only city where people bought more
instant
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coffee
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 by almost 50%. In Hobart, fresh
coffee
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 purchases stood at a little less than 55%, higher than Brisbane at 52%, Melbourne at 48% and
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lastly
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apply
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Sydney at just over 45%. As the bar chart shows, fresh
coffee
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 sales were under 50% for all cities. Brisbane and
Adelaide
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 had a minimum amount of sales by about one-
third,
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Hobart and Melbourne were slightly more by 40%.
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, the maximum amount of sales belonged to Sydney by approximately 45%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words instant, coffee, adelaide with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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