The maps below show the layout of school in 1985 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps show a layout of buildings at school in 1985 and how it has changed in the present day.
Overall
, the most noticeable changes are related to an increasing number of buildings, transforming the road
and narrowing the playing fields
.
In 1985, there were two car
parks which were bigger and smaller in size. A big car
park
was located in the south of the exit and entrance gate. The big car
park
was surrounded by the road
which then
led to the playing fields
. Two classroom buildings, classrooms and classroom block, were constructed next to the playing fields
particularly in the east and west of the road
respectively. A small car
park
, which is located adjacent to the classrooms that have no storey, is on the opposite side of the library.
However
, the classroom block now is constructed with three storeys because of an increasing number of students up to 800 people. Many new infrastructures have also
been built which are a pool, fitness centre and learning resources centre. The learning resources centre is in the south of the office, and it has a computer room in it. Furthermore
, while
the playing fields
decreased in size, the car
park
changed in form from a semi-rectangle to a semi-circle. Additionally
, the main road
just has one straight line in route in the north of car
Correct article usage
the car
park
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