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the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The given bar chart compares the percentages of
people
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 who buy
coffee
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 and tea
along with
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 their drinking habits in five different cities in Australia.
Overall
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, the amount of
people
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 who bought instant
coffee
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 during the
last
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 4 weeks, is higher than
people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 in all five cities.
Also
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, more than 50 per cent of the city residents went out to buy their hot drinks in the
last
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 4 weeks, except for Adelaide citizens. The largest proportion of
people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 is allocated to Sydney with around 45%,
while
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 Brisbane and Adelaide with almost 35% of their populations have the lowest number of fresh
coffee
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 consumers.
Furthermore
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, more than half of the Hobart residents are interested in instant
coffee
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, which
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 the highest percentage among other cities.
In contrast
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, Sydney with about 45% of its population has the lowest percentage of instant
coffee
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 consumers. More than three-fifths of the population in Melbourne (63%), Hobart (62%), and Sydney (61%) are interested in having
coffee
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 outside their houses,
whereas
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people
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 in Adelaide have the lowest interest in going out to drink
coffee
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 (about 50%).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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