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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetable to some countries where such plants hardly grown or out of season. Some people consider it a good idea but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Fruit and plants have been exported and imported by planes in
the
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recent years and it
seem
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 to have an upward trend in the future,
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, even though
that
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there are several positive comments about it, there are still some controversial views
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 its disadvantages
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 as the uses of chemical to keep them fresh and usable.
This
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idea
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 because it
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 a bright road to develop in the next decade
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 many experiments all around the
world
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 and will shed
a
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light on the reason why. It can be easily observed that
vegetable
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 can be spoiled in a short time so
transport
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it
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in
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 a long period may be harmful
for
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 consumers, especially when it was moved by planes
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 the thick atmosphere in the sky.
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, it will make the fruits rapidly
be
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rotten
than
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on the ground and most
of
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companies and governments all over the
world
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 always want to transport it in
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large
amount
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 so it will cause devastating consequences to not only the
one
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 who buy these
fruit
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fruits
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 but
also
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 the one who provide it. Turning to the former opinion, it should be realized that technology has a profound impact on the way humans make
this
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idea
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become
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possible and we must
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 recognize that our modern society will always go up until there
is
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 no humans
is
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this
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world
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 so all of the negative effects come from the opposite
idea
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 could be gotten rid of by our intelligence. Artificial chemicals which was used to protect the
fresh
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 of exported plants could
be replace
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 by some natural elements which may not be
founded
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 on the Earth. Taking everything into account, it must be important to know that things will never stop changing especially our society and we will always develop to become better forms so aircraft will no longer be used widely to ship goods around
our
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world
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.
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,
this
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idea
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 of transporting by
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Perishable
  • Food security
  • Exporting
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon emissions
  • Expensive
  • Consumers
  • Logistics
  • Efficient
  • Accessibility
  • Sustainability
  • Global trade
  • Climate change
  • Market demand
  • Cultivated
  • Out of season
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