The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018
The graph illustrates the data about in 1968 and 2018
how
family Rephrase
apply
spend
their money Wrong verb form
spent
in
weekly in one country.
Change preposition
apply
Overall
, people spent a lot of money on food compared to other types of spending was highest in 1968. However
, this
parent had changed in 2018, and the family using
their money equally for food, housing and leisure.
Wrong verb form
used
Firstly
, the spreading type of food was higher than another type around 35% in 1968, but decreased dramatically in 2018. In addition
, the percentage of spending in
housing and clothing was similar percentage became Change preposition
on
second
Correct article usage
the second
higher
Correct word choice
highest
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
of
spending around 10%. Change preposition
apply
On the other hand
, household goods, personal goods and transport were nearly 10%.
Secondly
, there was
different parties in 2018. The percentage of leisure was the highest spending compared to Change the verb form
were
another type
Fix the agreement mistake
other types
also
more than double that of 1968. Furthermore
housing spreading in 2018 was also
higher than in 1968 around 10% becoming the second highest spending.Submitted by chien10955 on
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