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Aircrafts have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it is a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Due to
 the lack of vegetables and fruit in some countries, the number of
aircraft
 gradually increases in order to transport these plants. I contend that
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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 should not be used for
this
 purpose
due to
 environmental pollution. It is vital to understand that most of the planes in over the world use fuel to run their mechanism. Many people know that fuel is not friendly to the environment. Especially, it has a big impact on the ecosystem of the earth.
Aircraft
 release a huge amount of emissions to the atmosphere every day significantly affecting the ozone layer and leading to greenhouse gases. Melting ice caps is a prime example.
Due to
 the greenhouse gases, the temperature is getting higher day by day, which has a profound impact on numerous polar bears.
Moreover
, the rise in
aircraft
also
 depletes the natural resources of the earth and in the near future, there might be no more resources for humans.
Besides
 the disadvantage of the rise in planes, using
aircraft
 is very useful in time and vegetable quality. Planes help people save a large amount of time to transport fruit
instead
 of waiting for months when using other transportation.
Although
 the air freight’s price is expensive it can keep the vegetable fresh without withering. Taking everything into account, the
aircraft
 can speed up the process but it
also
 leads to many environmental problems. From my perspective, the number of
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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 should be reduced
due to
 pollution.
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