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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or out of season. Some people consider it is a good trend, but some appose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Numerous nations’
fruits
 and vegetable
industry
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industries
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 have witnessed an increasing popularity of using
aircrafts
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aircraft
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 to transport products to other countries.
While
 some people support
this
 trend, others think it is unnecessary.
This
 essay will discuss both views and
shows
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writer’s
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the writer’s
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 opinion that the
airline
 should not be overused to deliver
fruits
 and
vegetables
. The
airline
 is known as the fastest and safest method of travelling. With
an
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incredible speed, planes could travel overseas or from
a
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one
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 country to another
one
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just in 12 hours, so
fruits
 and
vegetables
 can keep their best qualities.
Aircrafts
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Aircraft
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also
 approach some places which
suffered
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 from natural disasters more easily than trucks in
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the condition
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condition
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conditions
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that
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where
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 roads are collapsed.
On the other hand
, the cost
for
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 a flight is too expensive for internal deliveries.
Moreover
,
a
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research points out that
the
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airline
 contributes to 27% of total carbon dioxide emission, affecting
air
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the air
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qualities
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quality
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 of a plethora of countries
which
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 planes fly
over
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. Taking two things into account, I conclude that despite
many
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the many
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 benefits
in
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of
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 preserving
fruits
 and
vegetables
, we should use more methods of delivery effectively
instead
 of relying on the
airline
. Activating a plane using more expensive fuel,
reduce
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 the profit of the
fruits
 and
vegetables
 industry. Another reason is
aircrafts
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aircraft
 release
emission
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emissions
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 into the air,
make
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 it harder to control air pollution and climate
changes
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. In brief, using
aircrafts
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aircraft
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 to transport
fruits
 and
vegetables
have
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has
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 many advantages and disadvantages.
However
, the
airline
 should not be overused in order to save our environment.

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