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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. discuss both views and give your own

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
Although
 some individuals may believe learning a foreign
language
 is only necessary if one is going to have a trip or make a living out of it,
due to
 the fact that
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 will offer
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wider job opportunities to those who are bilingual or polyglot in abroad. But I would argue that these are not the only reasons for other
people
 who may go after learning a foreign
language
. These days
due to
the
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globalization more and more international companies mushrooming.
And they
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 all rely on employees who have enough knowledge in at least two or more foreign languages other than their mother tongue.
This
 fact adds
values
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 to those who are bilingual because it
make
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 them more valuable competitor than those who are just monolingual.
Thus
, bilingual employees have
wider
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 range of options in front of them to choose and start their professional life.
Also
, the other reason that these
people
 may claim that studying
foreign
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language
 is important is because they believe that it will improve the experience of having a better
travels
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due to
 enhancing communication skills.
On the other hand
, in my point of view studying other
language
 will
also
 help out
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 other cultures better and deepens
the
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 relationships with foreigners.
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 on that communication rules the world, it
make
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 bilinguals more socially empathic individuals. You may
as
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 how is that possible
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 Let me explain it to you with an example.
Language
have
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 a deep relation with culture and it
come
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 straight out of what a
society
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 and
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 with and
also
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 how
people
 think and what are their
logics
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. When a foreigner
start
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 learning about another
language
 on
this
 base, they start understanding how one
society
 is actually working and get an idea of what are the issues in that
communities
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.
Due to
this
 matter of fact,
people
 who are studying and trying to get to know another
language
 will gradually gain more sympathy and become much more empathic about problems a
society
 is facing.
Therefore
 they will experience
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a
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great inclusion in that
society
 and can make
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a
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deeper and more meaningful friendships and communications. In
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however
 it is surely true that learning a foreign
language
 will improve a better experience
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travelers
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 and it will
gives
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 better opportunities for those who are active in
job
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 market, but as I mentioned before one other reason could be gaining a better understanding and more realistic point of view from a culture and a
society
.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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