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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. discuss both views and give your own

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 some individuals may believe learning a foreign
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 is only necessary if one is going to have a trip or make a living out of it,
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 the fact that
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 will offer
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wider job opportunities to those who are bilingual or polyglot in abroad. But I would argue that these are not the only reasons for other
people
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 who may go after learning a foreign
language
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. These days
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globalization more and more international companies mushrooming.
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 all rely on employees who have enough knowledge in at least two or more foreign languages other than their mother tongue.
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 fact adds
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 to those who are bilingual because it
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 them more valuable competitor than those who are just monolingual.
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, bilingual employees have
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 range of options in front of them to choose and start their professional life.
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, the other reason that these
people
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 may claim that studying
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language
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 is important is because they believe that it will improve the experience of having a better
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due to
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 enhancing communication skills.
On the other hand
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, in my point of view studying other
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 will
also
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 help out
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 other cultures better and deepens
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 relationships with foreigners.
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 on that communication rules the world, it
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 bilinguals more socially empathic individuals. You may
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 how is that possible
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have
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 a deep relation with culture and it
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 straight out of what a
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 and
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 with and
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shape
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 how
people
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 think and what are their
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. When a foreigner
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 learning about another
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 on
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 base, they start understanding how one
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 is actually working and get an idea of what are the issues in that
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.
Due to
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this
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 matter of fact,
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 who are studying and trying to get to know another
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 will gradually gain more sympathy and become much more empathic about problems a
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 is facing.
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 they will experience
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great inclusion in that
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 and can make
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a
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deeper and more meaningful friendships and communications. In
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however
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 it is surely true that learning a foreign
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 will improve a better experience
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travelers
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travellers
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 and it will
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 better opportunities for those who are active in
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the job
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 market, but as I mentioned before one other reason could be gaining a better understanding and more realistic point of view from a culture and a
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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