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SOME PEOPLE BELIVE THAT CHILDREN SHOULD NOT BE GIVEN HOMEWORK EVERDAY, WHILE OTHERS BELIEVE THAT THEY MUST GET HOMEWORK EVERYDAY IN ORDER TO BE SUCCESSFUL.

#people #belive #children #homework #everday
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Education is considered
as
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one of the most important
tool
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 for success. Most
of
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the
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people hold a belief that
homework
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 to not be an
everday
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everyday
 task for
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school going
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children
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,
whereas
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other
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others
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 vocalise by saying that it should be given
everyday
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for improving
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children
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's academic performance. I opine that
take home
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 tasks are a must, for improving the understanding of
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school taught
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 topics
into
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 greater
depths
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.
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with the pace at which the world is evolving, schools are making education their primary goal rather than sports and co-curricular activities.
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 is considered
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a mandatory task for
better
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 understanding of the topics that are taught in classes. The reason behind reading or solving the same topic twice is to maximise
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retention. It has been scientifically proven that going through the same topic twice within twenty-four hours increases the chances of retaining it to 98
per-cent
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.
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,
according to
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nationwide
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a nationwide
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 survey after
mandatising
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mandating
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homework
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 the academic performance of
childrens
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children
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 spiked from 45 to 75
per-cent
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 over a short period of time.
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, pressurising the
children
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 for their own good is disregarded by some of the populace as they opine that home tasks should not be given
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everyday
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.
Children
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 in today's era are unable to come out of the burden of studies and enjoy life. The fields other than study can be converted into a profession, but balancing two sticks at a time is a difficult task.
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,
the
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private
school
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 organisations have made a decision
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not
giving
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children
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homeworks
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homework
 at
leat
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 3 days
in
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a week, so that they can take a break from
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 and experiment
themselves
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with themselves
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 in many unexplored areas.
To sum up
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, the primary goal of the
school
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 should be to educate their students and make them academically efficient. To
acheive
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achieve
this
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homework
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 should be a part of
daily
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the daily
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 routine in every child's life and parents
also
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 have an important role in making them realise the importance of it.
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