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The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban and rural households in a certain country that had Internet access between 2011 and 2016. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Household Internet Access 60% "'1'1'""-;::==============::::;----------2011 2012 2013 2014 2015 2016 Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban and rural households in a certain country that had Internet access between 2011 and 2016. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Household Internet Access 60% "'1'1'""-;::==============::::;----------2011 2012 2013 2014 2015 2016 Write at least 150 words.
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The bar graph below depicts the availability of
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 in urban/suburban and rural households in a country during the span of five years,
that is
 from 2011 to 2016. The value is expressed in percentages.
Overall
, the proportion of households in both urban/suburban and rural having
internet
 access rose
cosiderably
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considerably
 over the course of time. The highest portion of houses using
internet
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the internet
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were
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 in the cities throughout the
timeline
. Around 15
per-cent
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per cent
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 of
the
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apply
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urban
household
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households
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 had
internet
 access
in
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at
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 the beginning of the
timeline
,
this
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and this
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 value nearly doubled
itself
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in the coming year. The proportion of houses with net connectivity continued to rise considerably over the course of four years,
finally
 clocking at approximately 53
per-cent
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per cent
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 in 2016. The percentage of homes in
rural
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a rural
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 area with
internet
acess
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access
were
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 just around 3
per-cent
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per cent
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 in 2011,
after
this
 the proportions continued to experience a steady increase over the course of
timeline
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the timeline
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, ending up somewhere near
to
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35
per-cent
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per cent
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 towards the end of the
timeline
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, timeline, per-cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • urban/suburban households
  • rural households
  • Internet access
  • 2011
  • 2016
  • increase
  • significantly lower
  • trend
  • gap
  • narrowed
  • advancements
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • reduced costs
  • government
  • private sector
  • initiatives
  • improve
  • infrastructure
  • contributed
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