The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

Some people think that
science
should
became
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a better place
of
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in
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people’s lives and
this
has to be
it’s
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main aim. I
am totally agree
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with that opinion and from my perspective,
science
one and only
tools
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tool
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can
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that can
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improve
person’s
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a person’s
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life
from
health
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to
time
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management perspective. Being healthy is one of the most crucial
aspect
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for sustain
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of sustaining
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good
life
. Recent developments in
the
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apply
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genetics and medicine help humanity
for
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apply
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not only in unhealthy conditions but
also
prevent
it
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from
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dieases
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diseases
and boost their health in daily
routine
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. With
cutting edge
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technologies in molecular biology, doctors can plan personal treatment with better
outcome
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in
short
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time
.
Furthermore
, they have
ability
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to check
person’s
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a person’s
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weaknesses
in
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at
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cell
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level and boost their health.
For example
, lack of B12 vitamins cause different issues
such
as stress, hard to memorise things and anxiety that
effects
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people’s daily
life
but doctors can easily help them with different pills. On the other
hands
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, lots of work
done
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is done
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by machines nowadays which saves people’s
time
for
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to
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spend
this
space on themselves and improve
them
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themselves
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in different fields. AI and robots do different tasks in companies from carrying heavy weights to
calculate
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profit and
prepare
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financial reports.
This
cause
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to lessen
working
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in working
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times in a week from five days to three days. So, people have more leisure
time
to gain different abilities which improve their
life
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lives
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,
such
as
spend
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time
on how to make
investment
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investments
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or gain knowledge about
second
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job to help them
for earning
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earn
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more money. If universities didn’t focus on major
science
objects
such
as
,
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mechanics and mathematics,
this outcomes
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this outcome
these outcomes
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couldn’t
possible
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be possible
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in that way. In conclusion,
science
should only focus on
to touch
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human’s
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human
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life
not
spend
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spending
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time
in
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on
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other things that can’t help society because technology is
only
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the only
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tools
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tool
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that
help
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helps
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us to live in good conditions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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