The graph below shows the number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004
The bar chart above illustrates the expected highest population of Asian
elephants
. Overall
, there was a downward trend in the figure of elephants
in the countries listed.
In 1997, standing at 10000 individuals
, India was the country which owned the most elephants
, followed by Myanmar with about 6000, and Thailand with 4000. While
there was a sharp decrease in the figure of beasts in India and Thailand, a slight decrease was seen in Myanmar. In 2004, the number
of individuals
in India decreased by 2000, while
in Thailand, it decreased by more than a
half, from 4000 to only 1800. Myanmar dropped slightly, from about 6000 to 5500.
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On the other hand
, in 1997, the number
of elephants
in Vietnam, Laos and Cambodia was the same, with about 1500 individuals
, while
in Sri Lanka and Malaysia, it was 3000. China was the least with only 1000 individuals
. After 7 years, the number
of elephants
in Vietnam, Laos and Sri Lanka decreased slightly, while
the number
of beasts in Malaysia and China decreased over
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by over
a
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Additionally
, the figure of
Cambodia slightly increased.Change preposition
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