Some people say that television is useful for education, while others say it is useful only for entertainment. Discus both views and give your opinion.

It is believed that watching
television
is beneficial for education but some people think the main reason for it is
entertainment
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for entertainment
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purposes only In
this
modern day
life
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life,
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I strongly agree that
television
is useful for education
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, for example,
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for
example
small kids
they
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learn the letters of the alphabet and numbers by just watching their favourite
programs
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programmes
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. Nowadays animation for kids
are
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is
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not only for
entertainment
but for teaching them.
Besides
kids
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kid's
kids'
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programs
there are
also
educational
programs
that are being shown
for
example
quizes
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quizzes
everyone watching can benefit
on
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from
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that, you can
also
learn something new, There are
also
maths
programs
one can watch to improve grades at school. There are
also
movies that are very educational
for
example
Nigerian movies,
they
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are not just there for
entertainment
purposes only but they teach through
their
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the
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moral of the story
However
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to a lesser
extent
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extent,
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I
also
agree with the usefulness of
television
for
entertainment
only
for
example
after a long week at work or school you can just sit at home ,watching music videos to relax and
also
to unwind Watching comedy
also
contribute
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contributes
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on
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to
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a healthy lifestyle because you will be laughing more and releasing stress.There are
also
dramas and series which are very interesting, these days Netflix is considered to be one of the best hobbies one can follow
although
it is addictive
To sum
up
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up,
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television
is important in our daily lives for education and
both
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apply
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entertainment
purposes, to have a healthy lifestyle you need to balance the two.
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