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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing ghings they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion

#people #places #visit #food #ghings #attitudes
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modrean
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modern
live
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have
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a lot
alot
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a lot
 of new
stuff
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chick
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try
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 new
stuff
intheirs
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in theirs
in their
 life
such
 as new
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destination
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travelling
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travelling
 and
eat
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 new types of food ,but others prefer to do what they used to do, in my point of
view
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i
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 agree with that point
saied
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said
saved
 everyone should
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try
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tray
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try
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 to
expermaints
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experiments
 new
stuff
 because it gives self-confidence and
improve
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theirs
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their
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knowledge
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knowledge
,
i
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 will discuss both ideas in
this
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is
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benifets
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benefits
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of trying
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 new things
.firest
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First
,when you try to do new
stuff
 that will give you
big
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a big
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 chance to expand
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your knowledg
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knowledg
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knowledge
.
forexample
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For example
,
i
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 have
egyption
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Egyptian
 friend called ALI, he
was started
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has started
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 his routs in JORDAN ,
then
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traveled
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travelled
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 to POLAND which
it
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apply
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was
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the firest
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firest
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first
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 step to
succesed
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succeed
success
because he found
agood
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a good
 job in
city
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the city
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 bank
also
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and also
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complet
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completed
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master
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master's
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 degree there ,so we can see when you
chalange
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challenge
change
 your self and go outside
domastic
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domestic
 area you are going to make changing .second
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when dose mother make
new
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the new
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 dish in
hous
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house
 that would be impressive and give her
confideanse
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confidence
 despite the dish is not good enough,so the gist
is do
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is done
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 what you
thinks
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think
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 better for your life. on
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the others
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others
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other
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 hand , some people are
scary
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to do
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of doing
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 new
stuff
 which
is
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may
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 maybe risky , almost
people
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all people
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 used to daily life that likes who have
same
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the same
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 job and stay to work there for
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a long
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along
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a long
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 time without any changes because they have convictions about
stay
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staying
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 without
do
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doing
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • open-minded
  • adventurous
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • experiences
  • expand horizons
  • broaden perspective
  • variety
  • repetition
  • familiarity
  • novelty
  • curiosity
  • risk-taking
  • monotony
  • predictability
  • flexibility
  • late bloomer
  • conservative
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