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it is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not.

#people #talents #sport #music
Nowadays is a common opinion that there is a category of individuals with particular
talent
 and others who have not. There is no denying
that
is
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it
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 could be true, but I hold the opinion that every person has a special attitude.
According to
 individuals who claim that some
people
 are born
for
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with
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 special
talent
, is unquestionable that it could be true both in sports and music.
For instance
,
there
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it
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 is common
see
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 young talented singer who has a particular voice
that is
 not imitable and even if someone try to emulate it, they can not.
The
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Talent
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talent
 is inside our soul and it
could
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can
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 be recognized
in
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at
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very
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 early age. Some
people
 are born for music, football
such
 as Cristiano Ronaldo, or other fields.
Besides
, it could be true
that is
genetical
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 and
depend
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 on our genes.
On the other hand
, is common
find
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to find
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people
 who, thanks to their attitude, passion and creativity, could enhance an unborn
talent
. Is well
know
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 that
talent
 is not the only thing that
matter
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matters
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, because if an individual
improve
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improves
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 his skills thanks to hard work, study and commitment, he will probably get better. One of the most critical
way
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ways
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 to become talented is the path we choose to achieve certain results.
For instance
, a child who
practice
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practices
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 everyday painting would probably increase his skill in a huge and faster way. In conclusion, I believe that
talent
 is luck. If
people
 work hard for their ambitions, they
would
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will
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 probably become whatever they want
Ito
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to
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 be
n
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in
 many fields. One of the
must
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most
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 important
thing
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things
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 is to be
focus
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 on what we love, no matter how much time it takes, but everyone can become a talented individual. Passion and resilience are the
key
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keys
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 to
be
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being
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succesful
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successful
such
in
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as in
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sport
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sports
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 and music.
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