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Some young people look forward to a year of travelling, a 'gap year'; before they begin work or university and see it as a chance to broaden their horizons. For others this is an expensive waste of time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Taking a
gap
year
 has been becoming more popular among
pupils
 in recent years.
While
 some people believe that a
gap
year
 may
positive
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 effects on students, others argue it may not. I, personally, believe that
this
 decision should depend on
individual’s
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the individual’s
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 personal life and aim, and I will explain
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this
 essay. On
one
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 hand, many people believe
in
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that
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 taking a
gap
year
 may give huge amounts of benefits to
pupils
. They can travel around the world in their
gap
year
 which gives them a valuable chance to meet new people,
develop
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 their
communications
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communication
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 or language skills. They can
also
 work in
gap
year
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years
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 and
this
 provides a
job
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them before
embark
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 on college
education
, which may put them one step ahead in the line of business
while
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when
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 they
appliying
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apply
 for a
job
 after their college
education
. On the other
hands
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, taking a
gap
year
 may be costly for some
pupils
, those who
have
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do have
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 not strong financial funds.
Additionally
, being far away from
education
 may result in a loss of academic momentum, and these students may have some troubles when they turn back the
education
.
Furthermore
,
pupils
 could lose some incentives, including bursaries or scholarships in their
gap
year
.
Finally
, I believe that the decision, whether
taking
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 a
gap
year
 should depend on
individual's
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the individual's
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 priorities. If their aim is
work
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to work
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 in a
job
 market, a
gap
year
 would be effective to learn the
job
 in the kitchen.
Whereas
 for those who are willing to be part of
some
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certain jobs
such
 as advocacy, medicine which require
well-rounded
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a well-rounded
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education
, a
gap
year
 may disrupt their academic momentum. In conclusion, taking a
gap
year
 could be very effective and
benefitial
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beneficial
 or harmful and distracting for
pupils
according to
 their purpose. Their aim and financial status should have a key role
about
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this
 decision.
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