Many people today are dissatisfied with their current jobs. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this?

Numerous prospective
employees
choose incorrect
degree
fields when they are becoming
students
and graduate
schools
. It leads to the disappointed feelings that
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during their
future
working period of life.
However
,
schools
and universities are able to prevent the problem. To start with, the main reason, in my opinion, which is affected by the negative feelings among the
employees
is formed when
students
graduate their high school. They are not able to get a significant amount of their life
experience
and develop a wide outlook during a school period. It
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because the majority
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of subjects
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in student
plan
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based
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mostly on theory. It leads to difficulties because candidates are not able to form an advanced
experience
about their
future
job
. They can achieve it mostly
by
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a practical way.
For example
, if
students
crack the books and
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only theory, they will not get a full imagination about their
future
degree
. Afterwards, when
students
are becoming to
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postgraduates and
employees
, most of them will have undelighted emotions
to
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their work and
field
in general. On the opposite side, educational institutes can solve the problem. Nowadays, career orientation classes are becoming widespread among numerous universities and
schools
. It presents possibilities for prospective
students
: they can try and
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themselves in a certain
field
and gain
experience
,
knowledge
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and knowledge
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and make their
world view
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more sophisticated.
For example
, the candidate highlighted scientific subjects and thinking about developing in medicine. The school cooperates with the
university
to organise a medical class, where the student is able to get advanced data,
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and knowledge
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and
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a
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part in practical exercises and meetings, which are realised by staff and
students
from the
university
. Afterwards, the educational
field
will become more visible. It can help prospective
students
to make a considered decision for their
future
degree
at
university
and
job
.
Hence
, making a deeply analysed decision based on gained
experience
,
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will affect
prospective
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work and behaviour of
employee
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employees
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. In conclusion, a significant amount of
employees
are getting negative emotions, because they
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able to gain
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in a practical way, to see the visibility structure of their
field
and form a point of view for their
future
job
.
However
, if the
schools
continue to develop the idea of career orientation classes, the prospective
students
will make considerate decisions for their
future
university
degree
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and
job
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jobs
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.
Subsequently
,
this
phenomenon will affect
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their
job
sensations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Unfulfilling job
  • Mental health
  • Physical health
  • Financial stability
  • Job security
  • Societal norms
  • Career choices
  • Pursuing passion
  • Practicality
  • Personal growth
  • Skill development
  • Self-esteem
  • Social status
  • Work-life balance
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