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in many countries around the world , there are too many vehicles on the road . what is the main reason for this ? What measures could be taken to counter this situation?

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It can be clearly seen that there are numerous amount of
vehicles
 on cities road. the root cause for
this
 is the
improversehed
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impoverished
 public
transport
 , and it can be solved by encouraging residents
move
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to move
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 by
variety
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a variety
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 of public
vehicles
. The underlying root of the issue is
disappointment
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the disappointment
a disappointment
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 of the public
transport
 service. it must be
regconised
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recognised
recognized
 that almost
vehicles
 which are
goverment
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government
offered
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offers
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 are outdated and it does not run frequently and on time.
consequently
, many
people
use
own
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their own
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transports
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transport
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instead
 of
rely
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relying
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 on public means. In turn , if the
amount
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number
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 of
people
drive
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drives
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 themselves
vehicles
 , the population will happen and become severe.
this
 is true because a lot of
people
 feel uncomfortable and lack
of
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privacy when the
buses
 are not full of
seat
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seats
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 and too crowded , noise. what is more, the means now in
vietnam
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are
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do
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 not provide food or cair-conditioned,
it
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which
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 is inconvenient for passengers.
howerver
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However
, a solution can be found that
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
encourage
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encourages
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 residents
use
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to use
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 public
transport
 to
move
 . the most effective approach is
reduction
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the reduction
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 large amount of
vehicles
,
particular
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particularly
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is
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apply
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fume
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fumes
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. If
company
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the company
a company
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 of public means, many
people
 will be reliable
on
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apply
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and select
this
is
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as
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 the best choice to
tranpose
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transpose
.
Hence
,
buses
 will be more and more popular, residents will
favor
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favour
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to
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using
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use
 those.
for example
 , dwellers will prefer
move
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to move
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 by
buses
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bus
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 when the
goverment
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government
 reform
buses
more
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to more
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 state-of-the-art with
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a more
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more
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apply
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wider
seat
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seats
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,
air-conditioner
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air-conditioners
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 or even
apllying
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applying
 lower ticket prices .
Moreover
, the
goverment
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government
 would
make
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put
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higher
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a higher
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 tax on cars to reduce
number
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the number
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 of
car
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cars
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move
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moving
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on
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onto
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 paths.
therefore
 , many
people
use
 their
vehicles
 because of the poor public
transport
 .
nevetherless
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nevertheless
nonetheless
, supporting
dwellers
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dwellers'
dweller's
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use
public
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of public
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 means by many benefits will decrease
much vehicle
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many vehicles
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on
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apply
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ways.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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