The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.
The diagram provides information about the modifications that
were
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have
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appeared at West Park Secondary
School
since
it’s
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it was
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established in 1950.
Overall
, a comparison of the three diagrams reveals a change in functional, urbanisation and modernisation ways. There were some significant
changes
during 1950 and 1980 (the
school
had become more urbanised and had some functional
changes
by 1980). Afterwards, the building had had some minor modifications in
sizes
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the sizes
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of the spaces in the areas by 2010. It’s noticeable that the area
had
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has
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become more functional and adjusted to the
city
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city's
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standards. The building had some minor functional
changes
:
it’s
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it
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become
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became
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to
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apply
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the status «Main building» in 1980. It can be seen that the
school
invented the car park and science block in the north-western side where the houses were located in 1950.
Also
, the new sports field
is
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occupied the area of farmland
on
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in
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the south-western part in 1980.
On the other hand
, the area had some
moderately
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moderate
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changes
and transformed in a practical way in
a
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the
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period from 1950 to 1980. The car park
was
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occupied the entire western part of the
school
. The
sport
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sports
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field was moved to the south-eastern part and reduced some space.
Consequently
, the
play ground
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playground
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was become slightly smaller than in 1980 and was relocated
on
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to
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more
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a more
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western side than the sports field.
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