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Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Growing up teachers used to tell us that the key to success is education,
however
,
that is
 not the case. There are so many factors that
contributes
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 to a happy and lavish lifestyle. Various people think risk takers or those who
takes
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 chances will be successful in their lives,whilst several believe it results in
carefully
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 planning. I agree with those that believe success comes from taking risks, like what they say "if you don't try you will never know"
however
, risking only does not solve it there's
need
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 to be organised To a larger extent, I stand with those who believe in taking risks,
one
 day will change your life for good,
for example
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those who play lotto or bet online life can change in a blink of an eye. Even though it's
nerve wrecking
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 to partake
on
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 something you are not sure of,it is always worth the try,
one
 day will change a person's story
Although
 taking chances leads to success there is
also
 another point which needs to be taken into consideration,
thus
 the ability to plan,
one
 needs to be a planner. People need to know what they want in life and
also
 how to
achieve
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.
Also
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 there's
need
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 to set goals and
working
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 on them .
In addition
 to
that
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 a person needs to be disciplined to be successful In
conclusion
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 it's always good to take risks
although
 you can lose a lot of money in the process,
on the other
hand
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one
 needs to be organised and have the ability to plan properly to be successful. These two
goes
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 hand
on
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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