Many people nowadays tend to marry and have children in their thirties rather than at a younger age. Is this a positive or negative development?

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In today’s
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individuals prefer to marry and have kids at the
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of thirty
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of a young
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is
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totally depends on the person’s preferences, circumstances and mindset. I reckon
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this
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development has more advantages because
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the
age
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of thirties, you are enough mature to tackle and afford all the expenses of your family. Marrying at an early
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is risky because
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that
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, we have a childish mentality
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not enough experience and knowledge about marriage life and its responsibilities.
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,
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to choose
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of choosing
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the wrong partner
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and will lead to marital distress.
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, we are more focused on our career and future goals at a young
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. That’s why, we might have to give up some of
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ambitions, dreams and
aspiration
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. So, managing both things
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problematic in
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case.
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, in our thirties, we have settled
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our jobs or businesses because of
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, we have clear direction and enough knowledge to choose what kind of person we need and what we want our marriage to look like. We can see the world in the bigger picture and
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decisions
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our preferences and choices. At that
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, we are
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enough mature and know how to
upbring
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bring
our children so that, they become role
model
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for other’s people in future.
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,when we are in a position of financially stable
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we can provide better facilities, lifestyle and life standards to our upcoming family.
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, I believe that when a person is financially independent and successful in their life
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it’s the right
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to marry someone. Marriage is a huge responsibility and it’s our foremost duty to fulfil all the requirements and do
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the best
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for our family to create memories and a healthy environment.
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