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Many animals are endangered. Some people argue that we should only protect animals that are useful to humans. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Today the number of endangered species has reached an alarming proportion.
While
 people believe that humans should only protect
animals
 that are useful to us. I completely disagree with
this
 idea and I believe that we should protect all creatures. In
this
 essay, I will examine the reasons that support my opinion. One of the reasons for my disagreement is that I believe that a significant number of
animals
 are in danger of becoming extinct
as a result
 of human actions, human activities are harming the environment
this
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 has a great impact
in
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animals
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animals'
animal's
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 health,
For example
, water pollution is a result o human beings harmful habits
such
 as
:
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 throwing rubbish and
burningfossil
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burning fossil
 fuels that led to climate change
consequently
 the cleanliness of water is affected,
Then
animals
 are drinking polluted water.
Moreover
, every creature has a vital function within its ecosystem,
However
, every animal has an essential role in presenting
equlibrium
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equilibrium
 within the animal kingdom,
For instance
, the extinction of one animal can cause
a
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serious trouble for others because every animal has its own role within the ecosystem some are acting as
a
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prey and some as predator. In brief, I believe that
umans
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humans
 should protect all species not only the useful ones for
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
,
bescause
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because
 if one of them
disappers
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disappears
 the entire system could be
in
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 risk.
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