It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. Do the advantages of having a year off outweigh the disadvantages?
A year break after graduating from school before going to university has increased lately.
Eventhough
there will be some spaces for students to reflect and think deeply before choosing the next path of their life, Correct your spelling
Even though
but
it Correct word choice
apply
also
can be a boomerang so they stuck
on laziness. I believe that the advantages partially outweigh the disadvantages.
Add a missing verb
are stuck
Firstly
, future
is an artificial concept Correct article usage
the future
which
a space to think will be pivotal. The majority of Change preposition
in which
school
in Fix the agreement mistake
schools
this
world teach a vary
of subjects, Replace the word
variety
therefore
sometimes youngster
Fix the agreement mistake
youngsters
confuse
to opt the next major they want to diveWrong verb form
are confused
.
Change preposition
into.
For
instance
the desire of chemistry student isAdd a comma
instance,
persuing
Correct your spelling
pursuing
economic
for his bachelor , so he will need much more time to adjust his basic knowledge before entering university.
Replace the word
economics
Secondly
, sometimes youngsters are not focus
and just play around which can be addictive. To have a deep understanding Wrong verb form
focused
on
knowledge, repetition is Change preposition
of
a
key. Change the article
apply
However
, consuming free time the
whole year, their academic memory can be gone. Change preposition
for the
For example
, Correct article usage
a mathematic
mathematic
formula is complex and if we forget to add one variable we can ruin the whole answer. Replace the word
mathematical
Therefore
, student
should not be Add an article
the student
a student
waste
their time.
Change the form of the verb
wasting
To sum up
, nowadays, a year
break is popular among students Change noun form
year's
eventhough
it can be detrimental or Correct your spelling
even though
benefitial
it Correct your spelling
beneficial
depens
on how they treat it. Parents need to observe and accompany their child so Correct your spelling
depends
their
will be in the right way.Correct pronoun usage
they
Submitted by sifa.herdini on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...
Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+
Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!