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Some people say that it is. A waste of time to learn literature such as novel and poems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #waste #time #literature #novel #poems
Many people argue that spending time
to study
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 literature will be
waste
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 of time. Reading books
are
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 more productive than
glued our self
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on
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 bed doing nothing. I disagree with the notion
,
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 and will give reasons to my extent. With regards to
learn
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 about
novel
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novels
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 or poems, it can
provides
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 a deep understanding of different cultures and
perspective
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perspectives
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. Literation has been
spreaded
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spread
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 around the world so
then
 it produces
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a variaty
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variaty
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variety
 of books
contains
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 history, the heritage of a society, or
local
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the local
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 language.
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, a member of
exclusive
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 tribe living in the jungle produced a biography about the tribal who collect
a
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wild honey as their commodity, it is intriguing for people to know more and it can
enhance attracting
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tourist
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tourists
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 to buy the product. It is
also
 interesting to note that, literature can
stimulates
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 imagination and creativity. Some
scientist
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said
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say
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 that
earth
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is
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 unlimited sources to explore, but
through
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scientific thesis, or articles will help us to imagine what truly happens in our community. To give an example,
space
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 exploration book by Nasa will motivate a child to imagine how to build a rocket in their garage with limited utensils.
Eventhough
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,
not
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 all
of
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people have the ability to
creat
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 an imagination or even
willing
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 to read a book.
To conclude
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a
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time through
litteration
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iteration
literation
alliteration
 is
a
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completely wrong,
however
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 it is a method to enrich
ourself
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ourselves
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,
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 because it provides us with
new
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 idea and
stimulate
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 our view. It will be much worse if we turn our back
into
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 it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • profound
  • insight
  • diverse
  • perspectives
  • critical thinking
  • analytical skills
  • imagination
  • creativity
  • preserves
  • heritage
  • empathy
  • emotional intelligence
  • communication
  • escapism
  • entertainment
  • psychology
  • marketing
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