The charts show how often people in three age groups did various different evening activities in 1980 and 2010

The charts show how often people in three age groups did various

different evening activities in 1980 and 2010
The bar charts show information about five evening entertainment options among three age groups over a 30-year period from 1980.
Overall
, the most significant change relates to internet use, because no one spent time online in 1980. But by 2010, people of all ages were entertaining themselves at home on the computer. As mentioned, by 2010 online entertainment at home was the most popular of the activities, with most groups spending 14 evenings per month on
this
category.
This
replaced the popularity of visiting friends and family in 1980 as the most preferred activity with a range of 4-6 evenings monthly.
Apart from
this
, among 15 to
25-year olds
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25-year-olds
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, eating out, going to movies and shopping all increased in popularity. They all rose from around once in a month in 1980 to roughly five times in a week 30 years later.
In contrast
, the figure for visiting relatives and friends was stable at five times monthly. For people aged 26 to 50, eating out trebled in popularity. But the other three activities were being done only slightly more frequently by 2010.
Finally
, those over 51 changed little about how they spent their evenings.
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