The chart below shows the percentage of difference in income between men and women from 1978 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of difference in income between men and women from 1978 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the percentage difference in income between genders over the period of 1978 to 2008.
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, all the countries experienced a decline in numbers throughout the year,
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Australia is the only country to witness a sharp rise in 2008. In 1978, the highest figure was for Japan at 48%
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the lowest was for Australia at 18%.
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, Japan ruled the graph by maintaining the highest difference in 2008 at just over 40%. Meanwhile, the US started higher than the UK at 33% and 29%, respectively, but eventually decreased to about the same value as the UK by 2008 at about 27%. France
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had a similar journey to the UK but remained below the 20% mark consistently. It started with 20% in 1978 but gradually fell to about 17% in 2008 which was the lowest figure of that year. Australia decreased slightly to 26% in 1988 and stayed the same till 1998;
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its data rose rapidly to 24% in 2008.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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