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It is becoming more and more popular to discuss about expermentations on animals and that is should be stoped, but we all know how is importand to do some scientific discoveries for treatments, creating drugs and other investigations to go further.c

#expermentations #animals #know #importand #discoveries #treatments #drugs #investigations #c
It is becoming more and more popular to discuss
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expermentations
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, but we all know how is
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scientific discoveries for treatments, creating drugs and other investigations to go
further
. I would express my opinion
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that
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expermatation
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experimentation
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animals
 can be justified,
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 I believe that we can not do
test
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 or do
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experiments
 on people. Some
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a pharmacy and medicine. We are not creating medication just for humans but for
animals
 as well. It is how it is that
peaople
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people
 are homo sapiens and we stand higher
tahn
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than
animals
 we are smarter. We do not use
animals
 just for testing, but people use
animals
 for food as well. Probably it should be impossible to stop that.
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 the other hand, there are some opinions that we should avoid
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 investigations with
animals
 and even stop eating them,
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because
 they are alive and have
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 as
human
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 do. In my
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 there can be just a few alternatives for
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. One
as
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that
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 we could minimize
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experimentations
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 and try to do more research with IT. The second one
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maybe
 should be useful information
whitch
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, I will express my
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 as a human, we should help
for
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animals
 and we should put more
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 research to save
animals
 in wild nature and even do investigations on
animals
 to create
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 life for us and
animals
.
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