One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, we live in
developed
society, where technology has witnessed significant evolution Add an article
a developed
the developed
last
time. We can observe how improved medicine has become and plenty of incredible innovations are invented. Although
new impressive ways of care facilitate our live
and make Replace the word
lives
it
longer, it could require a lot of money.
Undoubtedly, developed medical care changed the way of treatment and Correct pronoun usage
them
prevents
plenty of fatal diseases. Wrong verb form
prevented
For instance
, now poor eyesight is not problem
as it Add an article
a problem
is
used to be. Unnecessary verb
apply
An
invention of various laser correction methods enabled people to get perfect eyesight. As well, these days, a lot of clinics suggest Correct article usage
The
variety
of vitamins for our health, Add an article
a variety
what
absolutely increases life expectancy. As an example, biological active Correct pronoun usage
which
adds
, or as it is more common BAA, are very widespread Correct your spelling
ads
method
of raising Fix the agreement mistake
methods
of
the tone of the organism. Change preposition
apply
Moreover
, they are sorted by effect on needing
zone of Correct article usage
the needing
body
or organs, so that Correct article usage
the body
user
can improve certain Fix the agreement mistake
users
part
.
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parts
On the other hand
, this
aspect has its own drawbacks. Almost all modern medical facilities are computer based
and function with its help. As we know electronic Add a hyphen
computer-based
system
sometimes may be out of work, Fix the agreement mistake
systems
what
causes Correct pronoun usage
which
failure
of Correct article usage
the failure
medicine
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medical
worker
. Fix the agreement mistake
workers
For example
, doctor
gather Correct article usage
a doctor
all
sufficient information about Correct determiner usage
apply
patient
in Add an article
the patient
a patient
computer
system, which Add an article
the computer
a computer
in
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apply
subsequent
has to be sent Change the word
subsequently
to
analysis or Change preposition
for
same
things. Correct article usage
the same
However
, any wrong act and system is broken, so that no planned work and treatment to person
. Add an article
the person
a person
Also
it occurs when equipment is damaged. Add a comma
Also,
Especially it
is Rephrase
It
huge
danger when Add an article
a huge
device
is Add an article
the device
a device
on
touch with people. Change preposition
in
Patient
is able to get injured.
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The patient
To conclude
, I would have to say that modern
way of treatment has both ups and downs. But looking at advantages, they outweigh and medicine should be enhanced year Correct article usage
the modern
on
year in order to be sure that society will be able Change preposition
after
easily
get good careFix the infinitive
to easily
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