One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, we live in
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society, where technology has witnessed significant evolution
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time. We can observe how improved medicine has become and plenty of incredible innovations are invented.
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new impressive ways of care facilitate our
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and make
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longer, it could require a lot of money. Undoubtedly, developed medical care changed the way of treatment and
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plenty of fatal diseases.
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, now poor eyesight is not
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as it
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used to be.
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invention of various laser correction methods enabled people to get perfect eyesight. As well, these days, a lot of clinics suggest
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of vitamins for our health,
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absolutely increases life expectancy. As an example, biological active
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, or as it is more common BAA, are very widespread
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of raising
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the tone of the organism.
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, they are sorted by effect on
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zone of
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or organs, so that
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can improve certain
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.
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,
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aspect has its own drawbacks. Almost all modern medical facilities are
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and function with its help. As we know electronic
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sometimes may be out of work,
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causes
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the failure
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of
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worker
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.
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,
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sufficient information about
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the patient
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in
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the computer
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system, which
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has to be sent
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analysis or
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things.
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, any wrong act and system is broken, so that no planned work and treatment to
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the person
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.
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Also
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it occurs when equipment is damaged.
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is
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danger when
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the device
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is
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touch with people.
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is able to get injured.
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, I would have to say that
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way of treatment has both ups and downs. But looking at advantages, they outweigh and medicine should be enhanced year
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year in order to be sure that society will be able
easily
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to easily
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get good care
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • health care systems
  • pension funds
  • extended family relationships
  • quality of life
  • aging population
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