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The growth of multinational companies and the resulting rise of globalization creates positive effects for all. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's era, where technology is at its peak, there is remarkable growth in the sector of multinational companies.
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, there is a rise in
globalisation
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, which in turn can be fruitful for everyone. It is agreed that the above-stated scenario is beneficial for all. Sharing
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up-to-date modern technology with the whole world through MNCs,
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 connecting the globe with the string of
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 will prove
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, the human race is achieving wonders in every sector, but there is a lot of discrepancy in the development of nations where technology is available as compared to the lacking ones.
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, Jamaica was listed as an underdeveloped nation,
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 a lack of basic commodities like trucks and cars. The erection of numerous multinational corporations from different countries and the implementation of modern tools and techniques have helped
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 nation secure a place on the list of developing nations.
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,
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 has made the availability of any commodity throughout the world possible. People from a particular nation have their own beliefs and rules,
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 of
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 has made them adopt different values and customs from around the globe flexibly.
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, in India, people used to communicate by writing letters via post and had to wait for weeks to complete a single conversation, before the arrival of mobile phones from Japan or America.
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, the rise in the number of multinational corporations and the advent of
globalisation
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as a result
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 has proven beneficial for everyone throughout the world. Multiple organisations should take part in implementing
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 company to the underdeveloped remote areas on the globe, to make them walk hand in hand with developed nations.
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