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The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1995, 2005, and 2015. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1995, 2005, and 2015. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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degrees
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 granted in the year 1995, 2005 and 2015 at the National University in the fields of
computer
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science
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,
medicine
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, business and
law
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. The values are expressed in percentages.
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, the majority of
degrees
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 were given in the field of
computer
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science
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throught
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through
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whereas
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 the proportion of
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law related
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degrees
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 counted for the least. Graduations in
medicine
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 despite little fluctuations, remained constant
overall
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. In 1995, 30 per
cent
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 of the
degrees
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 were given to both
computer
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science
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 and business, the graduation in
law
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 and
medicine
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 held 15 and 25 per
cent
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 of the
degrees
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 granted, respectively. In the following decade, the proportion of
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 given in
computer
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science
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 experienced a 10 per
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 rise,
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buisness
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business
 graduations fell by the same value.
Degrees
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 granted in the
filed
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field
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 of
medicine
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 saw a rise
by
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 5 per
cent
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than
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in
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previous
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 decade and
law
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exprienced
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experienced
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 5 per
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 than earlier. 45 per
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 of the
degrees
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 were granted in the field of
medicine
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 in 2015, followed by
medicine
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 which held 25 per
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 of the total distributions. Business and
law
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 shared 15 per
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 of the remaining
degrees
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, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, whereas".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words degrees, computer, science, medicine, law, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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