The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1995, 2005, and 2015. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1995, 2005, and 2015. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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degrees
granted in the year 1995, 2005 and 2015 at the National University in the fields of
computer
science
,
medicine
, business and
law
. The values are expressed in percentages.
Overall
, the majority of
degrees
were given in the field of
computer
science
throught
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through
,
whereas
the proportion of
law related
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degrees
counted for the least. Graduations in
medicine
despite little fluctuations, remained constant
overall
. In 1995, 30 per
cent
of the
degrees
were given to both
computer
science
and business, the graduation in
law
and
medicine
held 15 and 25 per
cent
of the
degrees
granted, respectively. In the following decade, the proportion of
degrees
given in
computer
science
experienced a 10 per
cent
rise,
whereas
buisness
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business
graduations fell by the same value.
Degrees
granted in the
filed
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of
medicine
saw a rise
by
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5 per
cent
than
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previous
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decade and
law
exprienced
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experienced
a fall
by
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5 per
cent
than earlier. 45 per
cent
of the
degrees
were granted in the field of
medicine
in 2015, followed by
medicine
which held 25 per
cent
of the total distributions. Business and
law
shared 15 per
cent
of the remaining
degrees
, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, whereas".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words degrees, computer, science, medicine, law, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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