Your friend who lives in another city has opened a new gift shop. You were unable to attend the inauguration due to an important competition you are a part of. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter you must Congratulate your friend Explain your inability to attend Mention that you will visit soon

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Hi my dear Sahar, How are you doing? I miss you, and I want to know, you with your nice smile are

alwayse

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always

in my mind, and

also

, I am really glad to hear that you have opened a new gift shop in Shiraz.

To begin

, very warm congratulations on starting a new business in a traditional city. I believe

this

trade will attract a lot of tourists and everyone likes to give gifts whether that’s a birthday party or a marriage ceremony or for

souvenir

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. So I’m sure,

this

business will promote your financial goals. It is so bad that I will not join you on your starting day, but actually, I registered to attend an architecture competition which designed a famous metro station with my co-worker and

also

as a manager, it is my duty to present our offer design. Unfortunately, both of them will hold on the same day and I cannot join you.

However

, you have my word that I am going to visit you on the third of March because your home and store

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are

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close to my city, in

fact

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fact,

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I will see you as soon as possible. I am so interested that can visit you soon, and

ofcourse

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of course

I am so eager that can visit your pretty mother. Love, Sara

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

217 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Congratulations on the new shop
thrilled to hear
unfortunately
important competition
couldn't attend
rightly understand
looking forward to
visit soon
cannot wait to see

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