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Many couples delay pregnancy these days. Why is this? Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Many couples are likely to have a
child
 later in their
life
 these days.
While
 some people believe that
this
 tendency would result in bad consequences for
the
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society,
the
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others argue that
this
 amendment may give a chance to individuals to pursue their
career
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. I, personally, believe in the latter belief, and
this
 essay will examine why
advantages
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 of delaying
pregnancy
outweights
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outweighs
outweigh
 the drawbacks. One of the main reasons
of
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 delaying
pregnancy
 is establishing strong financial funds for
individual’s
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an individual’s
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life
 costs and
child’s
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need
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. Individuals have been suffering from
economic
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crisis
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 in recent years
,
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 so
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they are likely to prefer saving their money before they start a family.
Therefore
, they may
more
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 adequate about providing comprehensive
life
 conditions for both themselves and their children.
Additionally
, having a
child
 frequently leads to
loss
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 of
job
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 or academic momentum, particularly, for women. Compared with the general preference of women, today’s women prefer to be in business or
academy
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 in these days. They are likely to pursue their career or
businness
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business
 which
provide
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 them
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with economical
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economical
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 independence and
sense
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 of satisfaction
of
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life
. Despite
such
 advantages, having a
child
 later in
life
 may lead to some health concerns,
such
 as
pregnancy
 complications and abortions, which may result in sorrow or depression for parents.
Furthermore
, when people decide
having
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 a
child
 later in their
life
, they are likely to have one
child
instead
 of two or more, which may lead to a decrease in
birth
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 rate and loss of workforce in the long term. In conclusion,
while
 there are some drawbacks, including health issues and loss of physical
labor
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, I
belive
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believe
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 that delaying
pregnancy
 gives valuable advantages to individuals
such
 as
more
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 successful and satisfied
life
,
more
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 stable economic status. It is essential to realise that more satisfied and
financialy
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financially
 stronger parents may raise well-educated children which have the key role
for
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 shifting a country from
developing
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 to
developed
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