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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vetgetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it good idea, but some oppose it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#aircraft #transport #fruit #vetgetables #countries #plants #season #people #idea #oppose
Nowadays, some
countries
 have
problem
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problems
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of
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with
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season
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the season
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, so they need the vehicles to
move
 fruit and vegetables to them. The best
transport
 for some people
think
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 is
aircralf
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aircraft
,
while
 others think it
need
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needs
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 to oppose.
this
 statement will show that using
aircraft
 is
the
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a
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 good idea when
countries
 are out of season and will give
main
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the main
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 reasons
how
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for how
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this
 statement will be achieved. On the one hand, people consider
to oppose
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aircraf
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aircraft
 to
move
food
 to their
countries
, because they think these
action
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actions
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 can decrease the
agritural
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agricultural
 and
also
 make them depend on finance in
others
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other
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countries
.
Moreover
, these action shows that
this
 country
do
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does
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 not
have
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have to
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develop
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developed
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 of
financial
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finances
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in planting
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to plant
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 and selling
food
 when they have
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a prolem
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prolem
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problem
problems
of
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with
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weather
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the weather
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. On the other
hands
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, some individuals think it is a good idea, because these can make their communication have a good relationship with other areas.
Also
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these action
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this action
these actions
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 can solve to lack of fruit and vegetables in
countries
.
Although
 using
aircraft
have much
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has a lot of
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 money to pay,
this
vehicles
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vehicle
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 is the fastest
transport
 to
move
food
to
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apply
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anywhere
fastly
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quickly
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. In
m
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my
 opinion,
aircraft
 have been increasingly used to
transport
food
 to some
countries
 because
this
 is the fastest
transport
 so they can be relieved by other
countries
.
Also
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this vehicle
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these vehicles
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 do not have
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a crack
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crack
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cracks
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of
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in
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 traffic
jam
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jams
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 so
this
 is the best way of choosing
aircraft
 to
move
thier
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their
food
 in
countries
. In conclusion, fruit
ang
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and
 vegetables are very
neccessary
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necessary
 for people
on
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in
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 season
where
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who
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 have
problem
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problems
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of
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with
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weather
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the weather
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 and can not
product
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produce
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 something
eslse
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else
 in
this
, so
the
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a
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 good idea to solve
this
 problem is
using
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to use
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 fast
transport
 to
countries
 which need
the
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apply
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relief.

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