The diagram shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane
The flow diagram illustrates the steps involved in producing
sugar
from the Use synonyms
sugar
canes.
We can see that there are 7 steps involved in manufacturing Use synonyms
sugar
, and Use synonyms
sugar
cane is used as the initial material for Use synonyms
this
process.
first of all, Linking Words
sugar
cane is grown on the farmlands. After about 12-18 months Use synonyms
that
they become ready for picking, the canes are harvested either manually by the farmers or by using some special machinery. Correct word choice
when
The next step is
crushing, where the Linking Words
sugar
cane is turned into juice through the crushing machine. after that, the juice is ready to be purified Use synonyms
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by
through
passing the limestone filter. Change preposition
by
then
the purified juice is heated inside the evaporatorLinking Words
,
so that syrup is left for the next step which is centrifuging. During Remove the comma
apply
this
stage, Linking Words
sugar
crystals are separated from the syrup and transformed into a container to be dried and cooled which is the final step. Use synonyms
lastly
, the Linking Words
sugar
is ready to be packed and Use synonyms
labeled
in order to be sent to the market.Change the spelling
labelled
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