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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are of season some people consider it a good idea, but some people appose it. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

#aircraft #transport #fruit #vegetables #countries #plants #season #people #idea #appose
Many
people
keen
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are keen
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 on the idea that using
aircraft
 to carry
fruit
 and vegetables
to
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apply
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the
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apply
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oversea
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overseas
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 or in some
place
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places
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 can not
plant
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be done
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,
while
 some
people
 have
opinion
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an opinion
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 it is not a good idea.
This
writter
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writer
 will give
opinion
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an opinion
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 and show you what is the best option for you to
chose
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choose
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. On the one hand, vehicles that you use for many
adventages
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advantages
.
Firstly
 it enables consumers to gain a variety of fresh produce
through
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throughout
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 the year.
This
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aircraft
 lead you
balance
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such
 as a lot of
fruit
 that your health should be increased a lot.
Furthermore
 , flying vehicles can
increased
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increase
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 the economies of developing countries. So that we can see that
aircraft
 have a
possitive
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positive
 effect to
people
.
On the other hand
, citizens of our transport have idea that it will have a negative effect
o
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on
 environment impact,
also
 the emissions by air pollution so that i will lead to
people
 life more worse .
Moreover
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 if they use
plane
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a plane
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o
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to
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 move
fruit
, the higher
percent
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 that
fruit
 will be rotten and
people
 could get
poision
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poison
 after
ate
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eating
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 it.
Also
 if
people
 use
plane
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the plane
a plane
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 to
moving
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move
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 vegetables , the money that
people
paid
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pay
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 for it will be much
more
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apply
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higher
while
 other transport could
have
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cost
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lower
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less
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 money to buy. In my view, the decision
of using
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aircraft
 to transport
fruit
 and vegetables should be better because that will
increased
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increase
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people
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people's
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life
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lives
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 a lot , help them to know and taste new
flavour
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flavours
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,
also
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and also
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 make the economies of developing countries
more
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apply
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higher. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 using
aircraft
 should
be to
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apply
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strike and balance between ensuring access to fresh
produces
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produce
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 for all
people
 and for
the
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a
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 better environment.
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