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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of reason. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people appose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many
people
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are
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keen on the idea that using
aircraft
 to carry
fruit
 and vegetables overseas or in some place can not be done ,
while
 some
people
 have an opinion it is not a good idea.
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 writer will give
opinion
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your opinion
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 and show you what is the best option for you to choose . On the one hand, vehicles that you
use
 for many advantages .
Firstly
 it enables consumers to gain a variety of fresh produce throughout the year.
This
aircraft
lead
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leads
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 you to balance
such
 as a lot of
fruit
 that your health should be increased a lot.
Furthermore
 , flying vehicles can increase the economies of developing countries. So that we can see that
aircraft
 have a positive effect
to
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on
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people
 .
On the other hand
 , citizens of our transport have idea that it will have a negative effect
o
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on
environment impact,
also
 the emissions by air pollution so that i will lead to
people
 life more worse .
Moreover
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,
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if they
use
 a plane
o
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to
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move
fruit
 , the higher percentage
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of
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that
fruit
 will be rotten and
people
 could get poison after
ate
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eating
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it.
Also
 if
people
use
 the plane to move vegetables , the money that
people
paid
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pay
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for it will be much higher
while
 other transport could cost less money to buy. In my view, the decision to
use
aircraft
 to transport
fruit
 and vegetables should be better because that will
increase
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improve
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people
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people's
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life
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lives
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a lot , help them to know and taste new flavours ,
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and
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also
 make the economies of developing countries higher. In conclusion, using
aircraft
 should strike and balance between ensuring access to fresh
produces
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produce
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for all
people
 and for
the
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a
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better environment.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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